Thursday, November 11

1^st trimester – Day 45

Continued work in computer lab on our outlines and papers for Savage Inequalities unit

Discussed final revision including:

·         No use of

o   There is, there are, there was, or there were

·         Use strong, vivid action verbs instead

o   I think, I feel, I believe, in my opinion

o   1^st or 2^nd person (okay for 3^rd paragraph only)

·         No you, your, you’re

·         No I, me, us, we

o   Contractions

·         Add a title to your paper (centered)

·         Must include the title of the documentary in paper:

o   Savage Inequalities: Children in America’s Schools (1996)

·         Do NOT underline restated thesis in paragraph V.

FCAs – Focus Correction Areas

1. Typed paper avoids 1^st and 2^nd person and is NEAT and THOUGHTFULLY constructed
1. Times New Roman – 12 pt. font; whole paper is double spaced (Do NOT triple space between paragraphs); Name, date, hour (in header); pages numbered in footer (bottom, right-hand side)
2. 7 DIFFFERNT transitions used (You must circle each one with pen or pencil or no credit will be earned) – see Transition handout
3. 1 direct quotation from film (You must BOLD IT ON COMPUTER)
4. Your thesis statement and all 3 topic sentences must be underlined (or no credit will be earned)  
1. Do NOT underline restated thesis in paragraph V.
5. Full title of film/documentary is underlined.
6. No use of there is, there are, there was, there were
7. No contractions (ex. use “do not” instead of “don’t”; use “is not” for “isn’t” etc.)

Showed how to SEARCH for words in Microsoft 2010: Home/Find/there, you, ‘ , me, I,

Homework:

Typed paper stapled to handwritten outline due tomorrow, Friday, November 11

No vocabulary test this week.